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I am about to publish my first book, but dear god, idk if the manuscript is good enough, or what needs tweaking, etc.
I would like someone to maybe help me read over parts of it? See if it works? DX
I will compensate you for your time! Just lmk what you want (within reason) for help with my book.
I really just need help man it's kinda escaping me and my brain hurts.

Hello!

I don't think I'll have too much to say considering you're likely a much more advanced writer than I am, but I'd love to take a look at it! Are you looking for spelling/grammar accuracy, interest check for the general idea, or opinion on your word choices?

An easy tip I heard a bit ago that's helped my writing a lot is that telling outright what's happening or what a character is feeling rather than showing can make the scene feel a little boring or make it come across as less-advanced than you'd want.

The words "feel/felt" is a sign that you're telling instead of showing. If you notice it, find a different way to express the same thing.

Example:

Replace "He felt like he was going to pass out" with "The floor seemed to sway under his feet."

It gives more of a visual of how the character feels!


Another thing, if you have a character that is a minority or a part of a culture/community you aren't familiar with [Neurodivergent, LGBTQ+, or of a different ethnic culture], having people in those communities look over your work as a beta reader, have them talk with you about their experience and how you could make it seem more authentic and relatable is really useful.


I also want to ask if you'd like me to use tone indicators in conversation? I personally don't feel like I need them in many situations, but I do feel a bit more comfortable and they help prevent misunderstandings.