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Seek
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 10:35 AM
Post #401
Honestly, this sounds amazing :)
The plot seems well-rounded and smooth, though it may be a tiny more fun if you put some sort of villain in the story? Or maybe a bigger conflict?
To me, the "No Chivalry" aspect of things would make a good series, but book-to-book, you would still need an individual conflict.
But, this all of course is just my opinion.
It is something that I think you should purse though, and if you do, I'd love to proofread/help you edit it!
Orcastration
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 11:15 AM
Post #402
Yessss
Better then my emoji movie ripoff lol
Vaingel
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 11:24 AM
Post #403
Hmmm, you're right
But I'm not sure what kind of conflict I could add
It could be an internal or family struggle, but maybe something else would be more interesting? Or it could be something about trying to change the world and make it a better place or something, and the resistance and judgement they face from their peers, which could then play into internal conflict
Vaingel
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 11:24 AM
Post #404
Pretty sure anyone could do the emoji movie better than the emoji movie XD
Orcastration
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 11:28 AM
Post #405
Its a book version. So imagine if characters were actual folk and authors hav epower over them (the authorsndknt know this though).
Thats basically it
Vaingel
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 11:33 AM
Post #406
Bruh
You could have something like ssbu and the characters r e b e l a n d s l a y t h e m a s t e r s t h a t h e l d t h e m i n c a p t i v i t y k i l l i n g t h e i r l o v e d o n e s o n a w h i m a n d c r e a t i n g v i l l a i n s t o r i p t h e i r w o r l d a p a r t, then they free themselves and get their own lives :D
Seek
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 11:36 AM
Post #407
The family struggle does sound interesting, especially if you're going for a Victorian-type era for the setting, seeing as crossdressing was not seen as a good thing in that era, though it's nothing like what I was thinking.
A differt kind of conflict might be nice too though.
Maybe some jerk who's against chivalry for whatever the reason?
I know when most people think of chivalry, the first thing that comes to mind is knights, so if there is a fighting aspect of your story, something more like a solid person to be the villain would be fun as well.
For instance: the villains father/mother was in the original group of chivoulrus people and died in the corse of saving someone's life
Or, alternatively, a chivolrus lifestyle may get in the way of some black market or mafia type thing the villain is the leader of.
But that's only really if you plan on incorporating some sort of battle/fighting/action aspect to your story. If not, the inter struggle with the family sounds amazing!
(wow, sorry this is so long xD)
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 11:51 AM
Post #408
Not the point plus i dont wann ue a common trope
AlthouGJ t hats an idea. Like "hey so ur gonna bethis characrer that wants their own kife and stuff but you en up being what you were originally meant to do but ita done in your own way"
Wait thats it
Ur a genius *runs off*
Vaingel
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 12:02 PM
Post #409
It's alright X3 I don't mind long posts
And thank you for the help, I've got more ideas of what to do now :3 I'll put it up here when I have a few chapters down
Seek
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Posted: 10/14/2020 at 12:07 PM
Post #410
Awesome! So glad I could help.
UwU
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