This is on hold until I catch up with all the changes I need to make. Thank you to everyone who's helped out so far! :D

I wasn't sure where to put this, so here we go. (feel free to put up your own book for review, I'm happy to help, though I'm best for grammar and spelling and not so much plot and character)

There's this book I'm writing.
Well, editing for a friend, but writing.
Basically, I do everything but come up with the plot and characters.
I've been given permission by my friend to do this, so don't come at me with pitchforks.

Long story short, I want feedback.
I was given some rather excellent advice, so I'm editing every chapter of it.

Anyways...
How this works
1) Read a chapter (they're short) of the book. They'll be sent by PM.
2) Leave constructive criticism either here or in PM
3) Get paid in gold

Payment may fluctuate depending on demand, but since they're short and fairly grammatically sound, I'm thinking 10,000 g- 30,000 g, depending on how well you criticize. Think of the range like a grading scale.
//Payment may increase with fewer people wanting to help or decrease with more willing readers//

I should probably also warn you, my book is... adventure... dystopia... something, in a video game society, so if you don't like that, it would be interesting to get an opinion from someone with that point of view and all, but you should still know what you'r getting into.

What I, personally, am looking for in a critical review: (not necessarily in this order)

-things wrong with it (I REALLY like this. This to me means I'm being taken seriously and people want to see me do well, so don't be shy about saying what you hate about the writing ;w; too slow? not enough detail on setting?)

-things right in it (don't care that much about this, but it's good to know what people like)

-what you would do differently (but only if it's okay to use your idea, in case I decide I like it. this can include changing character names or even the book title, adjusting plot points or character personality, etc)

-overall review (basically an 'it was good' or 'it was bad' statement)

Available for review: Prologue, Chapter 1, Chapter 2, Chapter 3

People I need to pay (in case I go broke): debt-free :3

Hey
Rewards went up
Please send help

I would be up for reading it

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12o7k90Bkx0Jx8v-rSvNjHlu3A6y6W29wkDJfq0fUEqo/edit

Sorry it took so long!

:D Excellent!
I'll just set up a link for you
https://www.sylestia.com/forums/?thread=87171
Read as much of it as you like, but tell me how many chapters you read so I can give you proper payment :) It's per chapter

Thank you! I appreciate the help :3 Go ahead and send me a mushroom or something for 30,000 g

Sent, thank you!

Edit: wait shoot did I send it for nothing?

... you just sent me a free mushroom :/

Oops, sorry!
Sent another one xD

Hi, I'd be interested in reading your story :)
I have some time on my hands so I can read everything you currently have, though I can't guarantee great feedback. I've never done this before. I do read a lot though so maybe you'll find something useful :)