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Neo gave a quite laugh, rubbing against Dawn. She shoved her down with a mock growl and batted at her muzzle. The two burst out laughing and tussled playfully in the grass under the stars.

After maybe a half hour or so, Neo got up. "We should probably head back to camp for the night." She said. They still lived in the same camp as they did with their parents, but they moved to a smaller tent a little away from most the other tents. "It's getting late and we'll have to get up early tomorrow to hunt." Neither of them ate all that much meat, but in the camp everyone helped out. Dawn streched and yawned. "Alright" she said. "Lead the way."

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Ok, So far on the story we have:

The lighera drank daintly from the river. She was dark, with blue dots, almost like Constellations. Her name was Neo. She heard the faint sound of leaves rustling behind her and turned. After a minute she decided it was nothing and turned back to the water. Then the rustling happened again. Finally out from the bushes came her twin sister, Dawn. She looked exactly as she sounded and was the exact opposite of Neo besides her personality. Dawn came up and nuzzled Neo and then bent down to take a drink as well. Neo turned to look at the sky. She scanned the skies, silently pleading pleading for some sign of what to do next. Mom was gone, and at some point Dad had turned and had left too. She felt so alone except with her sister, and she no longer knew who to trust. Seeing nothing, she looked down at the scar on her shoulder. Dad's last "present" before he had gone and run off. Neo gazed at the night sky. It's was beautiful with all the twinkling stars and the bright moon. Then it seemed like it was raining stars. The meteor shower had started. The "shooting stars" races across the sky in numbers, looking like dancers among the stars. She nudged Dawn and nodded towards the sky. She laid down to watch and Neo curled around her. Suddenly a small piece of a meteor flew past and nicked Dawn's ear. "Ow! what??' She looked over to where it had landed. "Ooohh what a pretty rock!" she said. It was all the colors of the sunrise and was glowing a faint orange. She touched it with the back of her paw. it wasn't hot anymore, so she picked it up and popped it in her bag. Neo laughed "You and your shiny things." Neo gave a quite laugh, rubbing against Dawn. She shoved her down with a mock growl and batted at her muzzle. The two burst out laughing and tussled playfully in the grass under the stars. After maybe a half hour or so, Neo got up. "We should probably head back to camp for the night." She said. They still lived in the same camp as they did with their parents, but they moved to a smaller tent a little away from most the other tents. "It's getting late and we'll have to get up early tomorrow to hunt." Neither of them ate all that much meat, but in the camp everyone helped out. Dawn streched and yawned. "Alright" she said. "Lead the way."

I find something off about the images of Neo and Dawn. I thought it was said earlier that they "looked exactly the same, except their personalities were completely opposite"? Neo and Dawn not only act opposite, but the look opposite too... :P Maybe there was a change in the middle, although I can't seem to find one..

I think it was they looked like opposites and had the same personalities? I'm just not very good with having two people with the same personality but still having them act different, so that's probably why..

Link: https://www.sylestia.com/forums/?thread=48134&page=1#4 Author: Stardreamer33 Time Posted: 6/20/2017 at 9:00 PM Then the rustling happened again. Finally out from the bushes came her twin sister, Dawn. She looked exactly as she sounded and was the exact opposite of Neo besides her personality

Yeah, they acted the same, but looked opposite. My bad

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