Chapter One: Theives
Cass (I know there is someone on sylestia named Cass, but this is not that Cass) watched the small camp from the protection of a bush and the cloak of darkness that engulfed the clearing. The camp consisted of 3 small woolen tents, a pitiful campfire, and a lea-to off to the side. "These people don't know how to camp" she thought to herself. Cass wondered the purpose of the lean-to as there were only 3 guards, but she didnt think much of it. Her eyes surveyed the circle created by the tents for the sack of coins she was told of. As she searched she became aware of a small rustling in the trees. Her first instinct was that the small noise came from her best friend, Okami, who was backing her up on their small mission, but she quickly dismissed the thought. First of all, Okami wouldnt make a sound until Cass signaled to her that she had spotted the money, and secondly, the rustling came from the direction opposite of where Okami had placed herself. Cass stiffened for a moment as she considered the possibility that the sound was a predator lurking in the surrounding forest. This thought was also quickly dismissed. The wind was blowing towards her face, and the smell it carried wasnt that of an animal. Besides, wolves and other predators always hunt downwind, so that their scent doesnt carry to their prey. Before Cass could think about it much more, a young boy burst through the bushes, carrying a bundle of sticks. He had light blond hair with a tinge of strawberry in it, and his skin was a pale peach. Freckles sprinkled his face lightly, and his cheeks were rosy. His blue eyes were similar to a deers, constantly wide and innocent looking. Cass could tell this kid was pretty wimpy, but he looked kind of familiar. She quickly forgot about the boy as she spotted a medium sized sack near the opening of a tent. Bingo. As soon as she saw it she made a bird call that she heard earlier that night, and Okami instantly reacted. She ran out of the forest, making as much noise as she could. The guards jumped and instinctively reached to their waists, forgetting that their swords were carelessly left in their tents. Cass smirked. These men were cocky and didnt think anyone would have the guts to attack them. The boy stood frozen in terror, reinforcing his deer-like appearance. One of the men reached for the sack, realizing what was probably going on, but before he could snatch it up, he found himself pinned to a tree, a knife buried in his sleeve. Cass smiled yet again, thinking of her friend and her amazing skill and accuracy. The guards were to surprised and scared to even acknowledge the fact that their attacker was a young girl. Once they saw their companion, and even more importantly, the knife in his sleeve, they were out of there. Cass ran up and grabbed the sack of money before the remaining guard could remove himself from the tree. She turned her head for a second, and noticed that the boy was still there, still frozen in place. Casss eyebrows scrunched together. She would have thought he would have ran away as soon as the guards ran, if not sooner.

(I began writing this story last year, but I was thinking about it and decided to put it on here and continue writing it. If there is anything I can do to make it better please tell me.)

Chapter 2: kidnapped---ish.
Jake was having a pretty confusing night. He comes back from fetching the sticks the guards sent him to get as fuel for the fire, and suddenly this crazy girl comes running out of the forest and hurls a bunch of knives all over the place. He tried to run but was paralyzed with fear. He saw one of the guards reach for the sack of gold that he had collected from the village the visited earlier. Jake thought it was wrong how the people who were supposed to protect the village were practically robbing it, but there was nothing he could do about it. Jake jumped, snapping out of his thoughts, as he registered the fact that one of his superiors had gone from picking up a sack of gold to being pinned to a tree. He then acknowledged the fact that the other guards had ran off, and he didnt know how to get back to the village from their campsite. The guard that had been pinned to the tree ripped the knife from his sleeve and ran, leaving Jake standing alone in the clearing. Jake also acknowledged that another girl had meanwhile leaped from the bushes and grabbed the gold, and was beginning to run off into the forest, along with crazy knife gir. Halfway to the trees, the girl who grabbed the money looked back at him, and after a second of staring at him ran back to him, and before Jake could fully process what was going on, dragged him back into the forest with her.

It's excellent! I didn't see anything wrong by way of spelling or grammar.

However, I only have one problem with it. You didn't make it in paragraph form, so it's kind of hard to follow. I lost my place numerous times while reading, which made it frustrating to read despite how good the quality of it is. My suggestion is to write your story in paragraphs so it's easier for people to follow. It'll also be easier on the eyes as well because it won't be one big block of text.

Keep up the great work! :D