lordy jesus
I have spent too much time and sanity on this thing
114 layers!! 114!! AND we ain't even done!
and i gotta fix some things.

Who played Fallen Order? Imo it was a great game, accidentally glitched it a few times lol. But since I'm a huge JRPG player of games with storylines many many hours long, I felt it was rather short. BUT there's rumors of a sequel or something 'continuing Cal's story' or so I've heard so :)))))

it be cal kestis. done on my phoney phone phone


update: ONE HUNDRED AND NINETY EIGHT (198!!!) layers and counting. Not terribly happy with the sleeve thingy right now buttttt.....


Final update: 303 layers. Yeet

I-
...
How-
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wHaT tHe FuC-

How do you-

tHe ******kkK???



-Translation: This looks amazing-

Hahaha thank you! :3
(it's how I deal with finals stress shhhh)

what glorious app do you use that allows for over 100+ layers?? teach me your secrets please ;v;

I use Medibang Paint on an Android (galaxy note 9?). Swear by it. xD

I don't know if I should do the background as Bracca or Zeffo. Thoughts?
bracca:
zeffo:

_{yells Bracca in the distance}

fRiCk
I can't even draw with the tablet I got for drawing-
How the heCK did you pull this off?
It's amazing~

I've played the game-
I can confirm that I managed to fall off every platform and swim in the void-

I haven't heard of any rumors but then again I don't get around the internet much.
sdkaokd

Thank you!
I, too, am a large fan of swimming in the void. (and my inner gamer tells me to routinely jump off cliffs lol. "Can I get there? Probably not! We're gonna try anyways!" Since you're one of the few I've spotted that has played the game, could I point you to my thread thing because I'm writing a novelization and my planning sucks?
https://www.sylestia.com/forums/?thread=85144
I thought it would be a good idea because I'm stuck on my actual novel and can't. (but now I'm stuck on this one too hrNG)

wodaw mood-
Okay first off, I write in my free time but it's more of a crack writing style I do.
Write when you get the inspiration and edit it in your free time.
Just write down what you think and go back to edit in when you're sAnE-

If you plan on putting the flashback in the beginning I suggest you make it kind of a hidden thing, like don't state it happened before as memory or flashback, reference sections of it throughout the story and let people think they have a bg b by piecing it together.
Readers love to think they have a big brain

Also this might be me and my tiny brain but what does acrid mean?

After the first section the writing style seems to switch immensely.
I suggest you separate it with ..--==--.. or something to make it seem like more of a time-skip or change up the writing style.

I think Bracca could be explained a bit better with the enviroment, maybe add in some ways to resemble how things look, smell and sound like.
Idk I'm not that serious of a writer once again.
The scrapper guild part looks good, maybe add in ways to resemble it- Ways the reader and their #bigbrain understand and know right off the bat.

Also take note I'm very picky and you really should try and find more people that are less picky.

big brain gang
Acrid means like really strong or pungent, usually in reference to a scent or taste. I was gonna put the entire flashback in the beginning to kinda solidify Cal's character and trauma (as a nightmare, recurring perhaps).

I wanted the first section to read like the opening crawl kinda from the movies.

I just started writing the flashback, so here it be

"Word was the Albedo Brave was leaving the Bracca system. Cal was sick of it - the Separatists had been cleared out weeks ago. There was nothing to do. "

And I need someone picky lol. None of my irl friends will criticize me! xD