In Creative Writing our final is coming up and I wanted to know if anyone was interested in either feedback or helping in polishing up the first chapter of my story I'd like to submit?

Select any piece of fiction that you have completed this year. It could be a short story, a short play, a collection of poetry, a screenplay, or a chapter of your novel. POLISH the piece so that it will be suitable for submission to a publishing company, This means get it as good as it can get. Fix all spelling, grammar, etc.
^The assignment^

I asked some friends already on the chapter I'd like to submit and they like it, but they don't really like, correct anything. (which is not too absurd I guess since it's an original story but like is the grammar and stuff okay?)

I dunno? Feedback is appreciated still and if anything looks weird I'd like to know ^^; (because it actually will be submitted to a publishing company, after this I need to write a query letter)

https://www.sylestia.com/forums/?thread=40968
(I'm only submitting the first chapter)

@99echosong99,
I have time to help if you'd like. I can be quite brutal with the editing, if that's what you're looking for?

I'm fine with that, I'd like that if your willing ^^;