Anyone is welcome to chat here. Talk about other stuff, pets, etc. Just keep the chat nice and try not to fight because this chat is fun and friendly:3

Oh, cool, you made it!

Anyway, since this is a chat....um....

How are you?

I'm fine.

Nice...um....so.....


How's your fan-fics going?

Good. I need to finish chapter 5 of Team Moon and continue Tribal Luffoxes 2:3

Neat! Your father in your fan fic then I am. XP

I am planing to add some more characters, but I need to figuer out how.

Trying to keep up with characters is a task. My Tribal Luffox story was made with lots of characters, I did keep up with them in the first one. I did take Shadow out of the second one because he's no longer with the tribe. He died: (He wasn't evil nor good, he was just crazy.)

Now I need to keep up with the other characters in the second one since I added the Ryories to it:3

Yeah, it seems really cool! Although, there is some things that I think could be inproved or something. While your style is good, I think you should describe things abit more, like this:

Demonflight woke up the next day and saw his sister outside with Toughwing, whispering to him. She strained her ears to listen to then, and barley made out what they where whispering about, which sounded like plans for the tribe.

"What are you two whispering about?" Demonflight walked out of the den to meet them, and sat down next to them, a puzzled look on her face.

"Well, what do you think about us becoming the tribe warriors?" Dovesight asked, a smile of excitement crawled on her face.

"We have to be older, Dovesight." Demonflight smiled like a mother would to her cubs, she didn't want to discourage Dovesight, but she needed to know that they still had to wait a while before they became warriors.

"I wish they could make us warriors now!" Toughwing jumped up, impatiences in his voice.

"Hey, let's see if our other friends are up this morning." Demonflight bounded over to Brownie and Bighorns's den. When she walked into the den, it was warm and comforting, the walls closing in like a blanket. She looked over to the couple, and opened her mouth, but the two knew what she was going to ask.

"Hey guys, if you are looking for your friends, they left." Bighorns smiled, looking over to the direction they left.

"Okay. Hi Brownie!" Dovesight waved to her,

"Hello Dovesight, it's nice to see you up." Brownie greeted her, smiling. She waved back to Dovesight, but Demonflight cut in,

"I guess we should find those three!" Demonflight dashed off, not waiting for anyone to protest.

"Wait for us!" Toughwing called, dashing after her, Dovesight close behind.

That's just how I think you can be a bit more descritpiove. Not trying to be mean ir anything, just saying I think it's something you should try to improve on.

Yes, I guess that would make sense:3 Demonflight is a male and Dovesight is the female by the way:3

I will start the descriptive writing in chapter 3. I finished chapter 2. But I might work on Team Moon and finish chapter 5 later tonight:3

The Tribal Luffoxes had more description in it, but I don't know why I'm not being so descriptive with the second one.

Maybe I will write the story in a note book then type it in the fanfiction if that helps:3

Oh well, typo!~

Anyway, good! It's alright to not be descriptive, sometimes I'm not, and I read in a book about righting that soem-one use to make stories that was mainly just characters speaking, and so, that helped them become script writers.

The notebook thing sounds like a good idea.