So I haven't been sleeping well lately, and recently came up with an idea for a story. I decide dto share this with you. (I'll probably be making a roleplay pretty soon as well)
I will post the story here. Please do not post until you see me write (End of Chapter) at the end of a post. That way chapters don't get broken up accidentally.
Feedback/consturctive criticism is greatly appreciated and encouraged. I lvoe hearing what people think! (And don't be afraid to be hard. I'd rather you give me a strong critique than an insincere pat on the back. I actually despise that.) Since I've had issues wiht this in the past: please, be nice. I highly encourage critiques, but please make them critiques. Don't just say thigns like "I hate this" etc. That doesn't help me. I want to know what can be done to make it better. I don't mind if you don't like it, you can be honest, but tell me why. (Sorry, just really hate when people do that...posted thigns on many sites before and ahd that happen, and it just leaves me feeling icky and confused...>.< )
Anyway, story coming soon! (Will be posting first chapter within a day or two. Proloque thingyish will be in next post, just to give you a taste.) |
Prologue thingy that isn't actually a prologue:
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‘Many moons ago, the land was ruled by two princesses. The eldest was wise and gentle. The people adored her, and worshiped her almost as if she were a goddess. She ruled with a kind heart and an eye towards what the kingdom needed most. The youngest was quiet and watchful. Not many knew her well, but most feared the evil they believed was possessed in her heart. But the youngest loved the people and her kingdom, possibly even more than her sister. She gave the people everything they desired, but they only wanted more and more.
‘Soon, the people grew weary of her many gifts. They grew bored, and the youngest princess found herself unable to account for every lustrous desire of her people. She realized with a deep sadness that her beloved people had become corrupted. She would never be able to make them happy. She realized that they only truly loved her gifts, and not her. She knew she could not force their friendships, and began to desire a new kingdom, where she could create a people who truly desired her leadership, and not only her presents.
‘One night, while all the kingdom was fast asleep, she stole into the darkness of night. With a voice sweet as a mother’s lullaby, she sang out across the land. She called the children to her. Entranced by her lullaby, they followed her. She led them far away, where nobody would come looking. When morning came, the children found themselves alone in a new world. They quickly fell in love with their Mother Princess, and did not know any other happiness.
‘Eventually, their Mother Princess returned to her home kingdom, and the children, now grown, were left alone. The Mother Princess quickly forgot about them, but they never forgot about her. We still remain, waiting for our Mother Princess to return to us and love us once again.’
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